VBB/KNK PRESENT: Detour vs Lakhryth (SHIT GETS AIRED OUT LOL) - Page 2

PancakeBrah · 09-30-2013, 09:51 AM

Quit making excuses. You put it out there. Quit responding to every critique. You're not stellar. Try harder at being better.

detour · 09-30-2013, 12:36 PM

forgive me for actually responding to people instead of ignoring them an acting like I'm above speaking to others...also forgive me for admitting this isn't my best showing instead of pretending like it is...any other life lessons u'd like to bless me with?

PancakeBrah · 09-30-2013, 12:41 PM

No. The ones I posted earlier still apply. You're below average so work harder to be better.

detour · 09-30-2013, 12:50 PM

word man thx for taking the time out ur busy day to give me such in depth an valuable responses...if there's ever anything I can do for u don't hesitate to ask...

Zen · 09-30-2013, 12:51 PM

I'll give constructive criticism without meaning to be a dick. The flow was good, but the problem I had with this was that you talked about shooting him and shit like that throughout the verse and only delivering a few punches. The punches you did do were ok considering the time restraints. Another thing, stop flailing your arms. That shit made me cringe honestly. If I was battling you I would bust out laughing if you flailed your arms like that. Js.
So my advice would be to stop telling people you'll shoot them and insult them more without flailing your arms.

PancakeBrah · 09-30-2013, 12:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by detour

word man thx for taking the time out ur busy day to give me such in depth an valuable responses...if there's ever anything I can do for u don't hesitate to ask...

Lol

veritas · 09-30-2013, 01:19 PM

too much filler. too much guns. slooow it down a little. I had trouble understanding what you were saying. I hate to say it Joshua it got a little boring...just keeping it real.

DLB · 09-30-2013, 01:52 PM

detour needs to battle better comp so they can expose him for being a netcee wanksta tbh

veritas · 09-30-2013, 02:19 PM

detour · 09-30-2013, 04:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Zenland

I'll give constructive criticism without meaning to be a dick. The flow was good, but the problem I had with this was that you talked about shooting him and shit like that throughout the verse and only delivering a few punches. The punches you did do were ok considering the time restraints. Another thing, stop flailing your arms. That shit made me cringe honestly. If I was battling you I would bust out laughing if you flailed your arms like that. Js.
So my advice would be to stop telling people you'll shoot them and insult them more without flailing your arms.

u know it's funny cuz I've been thinking the same thing about the arm motions...it's hard sometimes, cuz as a rapper u tend to keep ur rhythm a lot with ur hands...plus, didn't get to rehearse...definitely something I've been tryna calm down tho hahaha...an word @ it going too fast, I think I was tryin too hard to snap on the guy cuz I wasn't as comfortable with the material...all great advice tbh...

PancakeBrah · 09-30-2013, 04:52 PM

I disagree

detour · 09-30-2013, 05:44 PM

with what part lol?

09-30-2013, 12:36 PM	#22
detour Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 598 Accomplishments - Beat Diz (via Real Deal Handshake) Rep Power: 690963	forgive me for actually responding to people instead of ignoring them an acting like I'm above speaking to others...also forgive me for admitting this isn't my best showing instead of pretending like it is...any other life lessons u'd like to bless me with? Last edited by detour; 09-30-2013 at 12:39 PM.

09-30-2013, 09:51 AM	#21
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Quit making excuses. You put it out there. Quit responding to every critique. You're not stellar. Try harder at being better.

09-30-2013, 12:41 PM	#23
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	No. The ones I posted earlier still apply. You're below average so work harder to be better.

09-30-2013, 12:50 PM	#24
detour Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 598 Accomplishments - Beat Diz (via Real Deal Handshake) Rep Power: 690963	word man thx for taking the time out ur busy day to give me such in depth an valuable responses...if there's ever anything I can do for u don't hesitate to ask...

09-30-2013, 12:51 PM	#25
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I'll give constructive criticism without meaning to be a dick. The flow was good, but the problem I had with this was that you talked about shooting him and shit like that throughout the verse and only delivering a few punches. The punches you did do were ok considering the time restraints. Another thing, stop flailing your arms. That shit made me cringe honestly. If I was battling you I would bust out laughing if you flailed your arms like that. Js. So my advice would be to stop telling people you'll shoot them and insult them more without flailing your arms.

09-30-2013, 01:52 PM	#28
DLB COLTS GANG Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 2,371 Battle Record: 5-6 Rep Power: 0	detour needs to battle better comp so they can expose him for being a netcee wanksta tbh

09-30-2013, 04:52 PM	#31
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	I disagree

09-30-2013, 05:44 PM	#32
detour Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 598 Accomplishments - Beat Diz (via Real Deal Handshake) Rep Power: 690963	with what part lol?