I'm a mean girl

Adverse · 01-06-2023, 10:07 PM

Yeah I was just trying to keep the theme going lol

Pharaohs Army · 01-06-2023, 11:20 PM

Pull up on em, you see the 4 pop
Put 2 holes in your chest like the regina george bra
Crack your fucking jaw, like a brick in your mouth
Think mean girls, I break a crown and make it fly into the crowd

I really like the first rhyme here...that closing line I quoted is not easy IMO syllable-wise, but I eventually got it.

Great concepts and swag dopeness...thought it was stronger early but that could just be my attention as a reader and not a slight on the piece.

01-06-2023, 10:07 PM	#1
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	Yeah I was just trying to keep the theme going lol

01-06-2023, 11:20 PM	#2
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Pull up on em, you see the 4 pop Put 2 holes in your chest like the regina george bra Crack your fucking jaw, like a brick in your mouth Think mean girls, I break a crown and make it fly into the crowd I really like the first rhyme here...that closing line I quoted is not easy IMO syllable-wise, but I eventually got it. Great concepts and swag dopeness...thought it was stronger early but that could just be my attention as a reader and not a slight on the piece.