XI WK II: Quill (1-0) vs. sral (1-0) (SRAL WINS 5-2)

Pharaohs Army · 12-14-2022, 03:56 AM

I've got Quill here for telling an enertaining story with a good flow. Wanted to see what came next. Only knock here is the weak ending. I felt like those last 2-3 lines could have been thought about deeper or changed and a better ending would result. Yes - it fits with the topic/picture, but seemed to be a bit forced... but that is my only knock on the piece, which was quite good I thought.

This is rare because Lars technical prowess and ability to tell a story almost always wins out on my voting, but to be honest?- this verse was pretty boring to me. Yes, technically proficient as always...with inner rhymes and good multis... just didn't really engage me with the story nearly as much as Quill's verse.

12-14-2022, 03:56 AM	#1
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	I've got Quill here for telling an enertaining story with a good flow. Wanted to see what came next. Only knock here is the weak ending. I felt like those last 2-3 lines could have been thought about deeper or changed and a better ending would result. Yes - it fits with the topic/picture, but seemed to be a bit forced... but that is my only knock on the piece, which was quite good I thought. This is rare because Lars technical prowess and ability to tell a story almost always wins out on my voting, but to be honest?- this verse was pretty boring to me. Yes, technically proficient as always...with inner rhymes and good multis... just didn't really engage me with the story nearly as much as Quill's verse.