XI WK II: Cereal (1-0) vs. Dope girl (0-0) (CEREAL WINS 6-0)

Adverse · 12-13-2022, 07:10 AM

Honestly these are classic verses from both of you, but in this case “classic” isn’t synonymous with “good”

Cereal/Candy had the same vague writing that has hindered him for awhile now. I mean you’re getting creative, you’re painting pictures the imagery is cool but I would be lying if I knew what 97% of it meant. It seems like you’re just going off on a tangent and whatever you deem to sound good, you force in to your pieces, even if it has nothing to do with your story

DG on the other hand is a very simplistic writer, there’s not really any kind of overlying metaphor or bigger narrative, it’s usually a what you see is what you get type piece. It’s really not my type of writing and I don’t think it’s good tbh

V/Cereal

12-13-2022, 07:10 AM	#4
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	Honestly these are classic verses from both of you, but in this case “classic” isn’t synonymous with “good” Cereal/Candy had the same vague writing that has hindered him for awhile now. I mean you’re getting creative, you’re painting pictures the imagery is cool but I would be lying if I knew what 97% of it meant. It seems like you’re just going off on a tangent and whatever you deem to sound good, you force in to your pieces, even if it has nothing to do with your story DG on the other hand is a very simplistic writer, there’s not really any kind of overlying metaphor or bigger narrative, it’s usually a what you see is what you get type piece. It’s really not my type of writing and I don’t think it’s good tbh V/Cereal