XI WK 1: Adverse (0-0) vs. Quill (0-0) (QUILL WINS)

Universe · 12-04-2022, 10:57 PM

Quill:

This was a surprisingly well done verse built on a touching narrative. I thought it was perfect for the topic, more grounded in reality than I would've done, but there is brilliance in simplicity sometimes... I found myself transported to the POV of the character, seeing all the planes come and go in one montage as the protagonist remembers all the days he waited for the love of his life to return... I could almost hear the soundtrack as it reached the crescendo lol. Very well done. Rhyme scheme was fairly simple and predictable yet effective and clean, and most importantly, easy to read and digest. Right up my alley. Sometimes epic isn't better and you proved it here.

Good to have you around.

12-04-2022, 10:57 PM	#1
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Quill: This was a surprisingly well done verse built on a touching narrative. I thought it was perfect for the topic, more grounded in reality than I would've done, but there is brilliance in simplicity sometimes... I found myself transported to the POV of the character, seeing all the planes come and go in one montage as the protagonist remembers all the days he waited for the love of his life to return... I could almost hear the soundtrack as it reached the crescendo lol. Very well done. Rhyme scheme was fairly simple and predictable yet effective and clean, and most importantly, easy to read and digest. Right up my alley. Sometimes epic isn't better and you proved it here. Good to have you around. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..