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JustRap · 10-08-2022, 03:19 PM

I'm not sure what to make of this. It's obviously not off the top
Of the dome cause it's written, so more like a key style
I'm gonna guess a kind of low effort piece...
The rhymes are alright and it does flow but
The lines are super long, which I don't like, personally
So for a text drop I think it could have been more presentable
Nothing super noteworthy to mention in the piece
It's kinda just there....idk, to me this could have been
Dropped in the O.M. cypher section or something...
What does one critique here? All I can say is it's obvious
You can spit a little bit but having never read from you before
I'm not sure to what extent that is, would like to see
A more fleshed out and polished piece from you

10-08-2022, 03:19 PM	#2
JustRap Member Join Date: Jul 2022 Posts: 54 Rep Power: 0	I'm not sure what to make of this. It's obviously not off the top Of the dome cause it's written, so more like a key style I'm gonna guess a kind of low effort piece... The rhymes are alright and it does flow but The lines are super long, which I don't like, personally So for a text drop I think it could have been more presentable Nothing super noteworthy to mention in the piece It's kinda just there....idk, to me this could have been Dropped in the O.M. cypher section or something... What does one critique here? All I can say is it's obvious You can spit a little bit but having never read from you before I'm not sure to what extent that is, would like to see A more fleshed out and polished piece from you