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A Norse lullaby
I stopped rhyming on purpose.
Surely you haven’t noticed. Because that focus is hopeless from caskets with roses. My prose is your ghost left in repose with no postage. My flow is the coldest we’ve always all known this All alone where this zone is. You can hone in an hone it Until I suppose it’s…. I just black holed it. Oops. I lied. You died. Preside where you can’t reside. Either hands or mind, fucking wit mines, is like signing for suicide I influence ya mind like genjutsu, using your mind as it’s own disguise Ain’t never been what your used to, aborting tries from beyond the skies Never penning no lies, never pensive, I strive. Realize. One in a million ain’t even a fraction close Quantum electron leader of the faction Jon Connor folks Wit no need for grammar spinning phantom spokes Wheel in a wheel Do you see the pattern folks? You can’t even die-gest, so why should I rhyme or? should I get vie-lent, and then they all die, yes? Not my circus, not my monkeys, nothing survives pure. Still close to the streets like San Francisco junkies pushing the cure.
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Because that focus is hopeless from caskets with roses.
My prose is your ghost left in repose with no postage Way I read this made it cool. I'm such a good reader. The Northman is a dope movie.
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Fair and thank you. Keep reading good :)
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Like a smorgasbord of random thoughts laid on top of and spilling over into the cracks in the keyboard. A fun and effortless read. Not as deep or interesting as your usual offerings but still good enough to hold my attention for a bit.
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Enjoyed the read. Good stuff, @veritas
Did not enjoy @ACTIVATE SELF'S writing of the Americanised word and pronunciation of "smörgåsbord" as it's completely fucking butchered. And I've seen it a lot lately so got a bit of an acid reflux seeing the word getting fucked here, too This was a wild OM, see you again in 2 months
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