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Old 07-09-2022, 11:15 PM   #11
Adverse
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Dom:

I gave him a list of personals but his writing is obvious dookie
If some shit I brought up goes far w/ Spits, it’s cuz I’m hocking a loogie
^ decent, good connection in the set up

Lost a topical to the warthog. Four-zero. Wowsers dude.
Y’all went toe to toe w/ rhymes and that little piggy went to town on you
^ lol this was alright

Act like women like you but your methods are shady and sinister
If a girl is well disposed to you, you hid the body after raping and killing her
^ haha alright I see what you did there

One minute in your topical league and I got props that’s bigger than you
Step here and I’m a strict parent: you can get spanked w/ this Discipline too
^ think I’m missing something here. I get it on a basic level but not if there’s a deeper meaning

NYC:
No showed me in the aowl, i thought this guy was a vet…
Had him sooo shook he ducked HARD - you’d think he felt a seismic event
^ this was decent but not a hard hit by any means

It makes sense that killed u. We all think u should retire
When the semi spit, this Aussie got way too close to that ring of fire
^ the ideas decent feel like there’s probably a better way to word this though?

He fondles students, baits em w grades…so this herb is done to me.
I mean those marks ain’t even real anymore like German currency
^ yeah that’s okay.

Traumatizes them w his dick. Whole class calls genitals “dominate places”
No Saw I turn molesters into jigsaw puzzles, police’ll find dom in eight places
^ this was a decent flip but I think the set up was kind of meh. Punch isn’t exactly something new

Dom outboxed NYC here, don’t think Spitz is a bad battler but you can see that he’s out of his element a bit here. Like coming from strictly topical writing it’s hard to know exactly how to word shit to have the strongest impact but as I’ve been told a hundred times you’ve got to go for blood, make your lines sting, sometimes a clever reference isn’t enough. You got to hurt em. Decent battle fellas

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