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#11 |
low tide in serotonin bay
Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 2,752
Battle Record: 37-28
Champed - GWL Picture Challenge
- Guerrilla Writing League
- Black August II
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Dom:
I gave him a list of personals but his writing is obvious dookie If some shit I brought up goes far w/ Spits, it’s cuz I’m hocking a loogie ^ decent, good connection in the set up Lost a topical to the warthog. Four-zero. Wowsers dude. Y’all went toe to toe w/ rhymes and that little piggy went to town on you ^ lol this was alright Act like women like you but your methods are shady and sinister If a girl is well disposed to you, you hid the body after raping and killing her ^ haha alright I see what you did there One minute in your topical league and I got props that’s bigger than you Step here and I’m a strict parent: you can get spanked w/ this Discipline too ^ think I’m missing something here. I get it on a basic level but not if there’s a deeper meaning NYC: No showed me in the aowl, i thought this guy was a vet… Had him sooo shook he ducked HARD - you’d think he felt a seismic event ^ this was decent but not a hard hit by any means It makes sense that killed u. We all think u should retire When the semi spit, this Aussie got way too close to that ring of fire ^ the ideas decent feel like there’s probably a better way to word this though? He fondles students, baits em w grades…so this herb is done to me. I mean those marks ain’t even real anymore like German currency ^ yeah that’s okay. Traumatizes them w his dick. Whole class calls genitals “dominate places” No Saw I turn molesters into jigsaw puzzles, police’ll find dom in eight places ^ this was a decent flip but I think the set up was kind of meh. Punch isn’t exactly something new Dom outboxed NYC here, don’t think Spitz is a bad battler but you can see that he’s out of his element a bit here. Like coming from strictly topical writing it’s hard to know exactly how to word shit to have the strongest impact but as I’ve been told a hundred times you’ve got to go for blood, make your lines sting, sometimes a clever reference isn’t enough. You got to hurt em. Decent battle fellas V/ Dominate |
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