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Eŋg · 06-22-2013, 11:45 PM

I don't know, I certainly didn't hate it but there was something about it that struck me as odd, and made it difficult to appreciate. It wasn't the tone of the piece, it was more the construction, as if the verse wasn't sure what it wanted to be at times... caught in a movement?! The rhyming was consistent, even stellar in places... ideas were thrown around, a loose narrative moved somewhat forward. But the identity of this piece confuses me. In some ways it reminds me of how I might have written during a time. I don't meant to condescend, though. Keep writing.

06-22-2013, 11:45 PM	#17
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	I don't know, I certainly didn't hate it but there was something about it that struck me as odd, and made it difficult to appreciate. It wasn't the tone of the piece, it was more the construction, as if the verse wasn't sure what it wanted to be at times... caught in a movement?! The rhyming was consistent, even stellar in places... ideas were thrown around, a loose narrative moved somewhat forward. But the identity of this piece confuses me. In some ways it reminds me of how I might have written during a time. I don't meant to condescend, though. Keep writing.