DL Round 3-Finals (Universe vs MMLP)

Cereal · 09-10-2021, 08:52 PM

Creativity-- universe "Truth is, I haven't a clue why I called you Batman or Bruce
A tad bit confusing...

Because I always thought my Alice was you.." from start to finish he didnt let up it was a strong story and very colourful.. mmlp was cool i think by the title it was strong but just needed more colour to compete with universe on this one.. even the climax was dope
Entertainment-- universe "Establish a loop; I won't ever ask you if the pattern's askew
I'll never break my rhyme scheme, Alice... That's the saddest taboo!" i think right down to the opening quote it was dope and def had strong pressance.. you really had your writers voice strong and direction of your story.. and the fact it was a story made it that much better.. i think if you had came with a topic against mmlp story it would had been a loss..
Flow-- universe "But she declined to stoop to my level from her palace-like view" i think this was what category you shone the most.. the flow was off the chain.. from start to finish and just a fluent piece mostly end rhymes did it for me but the way you rhyme stoooood with the drag out of end rhyming was dope.. mmlp saying that your flow was bonkers to
Rhyme Scheme-- universe "Spaced out as Saturn to Jupiter, with poison ivy to ration my moods...
Amassed a talented crew; Put long-eared Halloween masks on my goons" halloween was the only loose word in the rhyming section even though it fits in lol.. was crazy.. but saying that mmlp vocab was really hitting hard and well put together i think his whole structure was only out by one/two compared to universes if left alone it would have been a flawless structure..
Consistency/Topic-- mmlp "Sharpening your wits as the biggest troll in the game." i really dug what you did with it to the flip of over powering control on decision and seculsion before having the decision was epic.. sort of like an online club you will never be apart of.. dope..
Literary Devices (alliteration, assonance, allusion, etc..) -- universe "A clown saw the humor..." it had some tight and rounded internals really rolled of the tongue nicely.. mmlp was still solid.. this is looking really one sided but mmlp you did bring top tier in these categories to..
Emotion-- mmlp "In-cohesive, in a set of summer with a sickness seeping" i think you really brought the depth of feeling with extreme knowledge about the topic..
Imagery-- universe "A lab rat with elaborate delusions, full of malice and booze" with such detail in a verse it was basicly 3/4 line had description.. so pretty to..

vote = universe

dope finals gus g/l

09-10-2021, 08:52 PM	#7
Cereal killa Join Date: Jun 2018 Posts: 859 Battle Record: 1-6 Rep Power: 1312300	Creativity-- universe "Truth is, I haven't a clue why I called you Batman or Bruce A tad bit confusing... Because I always thought my Alice was you.." from start to finish he didnt let up it was a strong story and very colourful.. mmlp was cool i think by the title it was strong but just needed more colour to compete with universe on this one.. even the climax was dope Entertainment-- universe "Establish a loop; I won't ever ask you if the pattern's askew I'll never break my rhyme scheme, Alice... That's the saddest taboo!" i think right down to the opening quote it was dope and def had strong pressance.. you really had your writers voice strong and direction of your story.. and the fact it was a story made it that much better.. i think if you had came with a topic against mmlp story it would had been a loss.. Flow-- universe "But she declined to stoop to my level from her palace-like view" i think this was what category you shone the most.. the flow was off the chain.. from start to finish and just a fluent piece mostly end rhymes did it for me but the way you rhyme stoooood with the drag out of end rhyming was dope.. mmlp saying that your flow was bonkers to Rhyme Scheme-- universe "Spaced out as Saturn to Jupiter, with poison ivy to ration my moods... Amassed a talented crew; Put long-eared Halloween masks on my goons" halloween was the only loose word in the rhyming section even though it fits in lol.. was crazy.. but saying that mmlp vocab was really hitting hard and well put together i think his whole structure was only out by one/two compared to universes if left alone it would have been a flawless structure.. Consistency/Topic-- mmlp "Sharpening your wits as the biggest troll in the game." i really dug what you did with it to the flip of over powering control on decision and seculsion before having the decision was epic.. sort of like an online club you will never be apart of.. dope.. Literary Devices (alliteration, assonance, allusion, etc..) -- universe "A clown saw the humor..." it had some tight and rounded internals really rolled of the tongue nicely.. mmlp was still solid.. this is looking really one sided but mmlp you did bring top tier in these categories to.. Emotion-- mmlp "In-cohesive, in a set of summer with a sickness seeping" i think you really brought the depth of feeling with extreme knowledge about the topic.. Imagery-- universe "A lab rat with elaborate delusions, full of malice and booze" with such detail in a verse it was basicly 3/4 line had description.. so pretty to.. vote = universe dope finals gus g/l __________________ A-double scribble - A 19 th century euphemism for ass ..