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Old 09-01-2021, 11:23 PM   #9
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Wow...all I got to say is...both brothers did their thing. Objective, I didn't know you had storytelling down...Great job bro. Universe's verse started a little rocky and caught major traction towards the middle and answered my thoughts in question and kept the steam throughout (I thoroughly enjoyed the psyche of the abused perspective, not in a sadistic way, but I a putting yourself in someone's shoes type of way). I also love where Objective took this story, I love the contrast, and this is what I have been wanting to see out of Objective and he is clearly showcasing his ability to really zone in. But for some reason, I didn't think I really needed all of that background story before the verse simply because I felt like I took away from the flow but after that, it was smooth sailing. Bothy gents did great in my opinion, well written and flow is on point. However, I am going to have to give it to Universe due to the psychological aspect of the story and disassociative aspects along with the disturbing feeling of the emotion of being a victim as well as the ending surprise.
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