WEEK SEVEN CONTENDERS MATCH: FRAZE 2-0 vs DIABLO 2-0 DIABLO WINS

Master Rock · 01-21-2021, 10:49 PM

D's verse opens in a way that reeled in my attention and left me wondering what's going on in this moment (especially with being left cold regarding his wife)? After the opener's choice in the word, " redolent" threw me off, I understand the meaning but felt it could have been substituted with another word (just a minor gripe). But once I got past that, it is a well-written story that forces you to look into a scored woman and how your choices to give in to your lust can leave you in a state of desperation. This part hit hard with emotion and placing you in the shoes of the man (especially if you are in a marriage),

"Where once she served as his guardian, a beacon of light,
gleaming so brightly as to encourage him to reach for the skies.
A bleaker horizon beckoned now the truth was out instead
and his ball and chain sure became a noose around his neck."

^^Goodness Gracious!

As for Fraze, your opening paragraph is hitting hard like a hammer bending nails (I was ready for what was to come but after the dopeness,
"Profane gestures from jaded jester pro at feigning mockery
Lost composure, no composer, couldn’t score it properly
My play’s a proper comedy... my normalcy’s anomaly",
then I couldn't find the subject matter in it until a little later).

I was looking for a relation to the opening verse and the topic and was having a hard time at times relating to the topic. The rhymes were there, the vibe, the flow, plenty of great ideas throughout:

"Bald ambition schemes to see the globe in my clutches.
King of all that I survey, that’s everything the light touches"

^Nice

"My hands hold the proof that all justice has died
Tied myself to the nearest star, now I’m ready to fly"

^ I love how this was tied together because I was wondering what's up with this superman talk??? But this was on point.

This was overall an enjoyable read from both. But due to the emotional content and ability to form a verse that cohesively blends the topic with the verse in matrimony, I'm going to have to give to D.

01-21-2021, 10:49 PM	#7
Master Rock Steadily Lurking Join Date: Jul 2013 Location: Beyond your reach Posts: 1,391 Battle Record: 7-7 Champed - Netcees Writers League Rep Power: 5599641	D's verse opens in a way that reeled in my attention and left me wondering what's going on in this moment (especially with being left cold regarding his wife)? After the opener's choice in the word, " redolent" threw me off, I understand the meaning but felt it could have been substituted with another word (just a minor gripe). But once I got past that, it is a well-written story that forces you to look into a scored woman and how your choices to give in to your lust can leave you in a state of desperation. This part hit hard with emotion and placing you in the shoes of the man (especially if you are in a marriage), "Where once she served as his guardian, a beacon of light, gleaming so brightly as to encourage him to reach for the skies. A bleaker horizon beckoned now the truth was out instead and his ball and chain sure became a noose around his neck." ^^Goodness Gracious! As for Fraze, your opening paragraph is hitting hard like a hammer bending nails (I was ready for what was to come but after the dopeness, "Profane gestures from jaded jester pro at feigning mockery Lost composure, no composer, couldn’t score it properly My play’s a proper comedy... my normalcy’s anomaly", then I couldn't find the subject matter in it until a little later). I was looking for a relation to the opening verse and the topic and was having a hard time at times relating to the topic. The rhymes were there, the vibe, the flow, plenty of great ideas throughout: "Bald ambition schemes to see the globe in my clutches. King of all that I survey, that’s everything the light touches" ^Nice "My hands hold the proof that all justice has died Tied myself to the nearest star, now I’m ready to fly" ^ I love how this was tied together because I was wondering what's up with this superman talk??? But this was on point. This was overall an enjoyable read from both. But due to the emotional content and ability to form a verse that cohesively blends the topic with the verse in matrimony, I'm going to have to give to D. __________________ https://www.instagram.com/master_rock1/ https://www.youtube.com/graphicalmindz Last edited by Master Rock; 01-21-2021 at 11:03 PM.