WEEK TWO: CANDY 0-1 VS CONCRETE 1-0 CONCRETE WINS

Pharaohs Army · 11-24-2020, 09:15 PM

Great Pic selection

Candy

A marked improvement from the last league.
You really focused on being consistent with your rhyming which was good.
Some good imagery, some dark, some not.
Of each face to face encounter for centuries
The trees breathe death in seeds to bleed cemeteries
Unconventional but I like it.

You wrote a good verse here and WOULD upset someone who didn't bring it like
Concrete

Awesome job man. You nailed a topic that I failed at a few years ago.
Good descriptions and rhyming throughout. Engaged throughout, despite the length.
as if they slowed down time, stared at me with glowing eyes
don't know why, they looked down on me with foreboding size
like a sick act of witchcraft glimmering through the pitch black
I reached for my rifle with a quick grab then let off six blasts
Speaks for itself pretty sick

V/ Concrete

11-24-2020, 09:15 PM	#12
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Great Pic selection Candy A marked improvement from the last league. You really focused on being consistent with your rhyming which was good. Some good imagery, some dark, some not. Of each face to face encounter for centuries The trees breathe death in seeds to bleed cemeteries Unconventional but I like it. You wrote a good verse here and WOULD upset someone who didn't bring it like Concrete Awesome job man. You nailed a topic that I failed at a few years ago. Good descriptions and rhyming throughout. Engaged throughout, despite the length. as if they slowed down time, stared at me with glowing eyes don't know why, they looked down on me with foreboding size like a sick act of witchcraft glimmering through the pitch black I reached for my rifle with a quick grab then let off six blasts Speaks for itself pretty sick V/ Concrete