WEEK TWO: CANDY 0-1 VS CONCRETE 1-0 CONCRETE WINS

Mr. J · 11-23-2020, 06:24 PM

Candy this was an improvement on last week's showing which made the read worthwhile. I enjoyed the start of your verse the most because it seemed to follow through with the topic at hand. As the verse progressed. I'd say about halfway through it seemed to slowly fall apart. Which is find. It happens from time to time. Your rhyming really begins to shine when you have less pressure on you. I don't know if that was due to your opponent or what but this was a nice showing.

Concrete. You really went in with your verse which is great especially considering this is the first verse I can recall reading from you. More often than none the competition seems to be lacking in the league which really makes it boring from time to time. The way you crafted each verse really showcased your ability to carry the topic. Compared to your opponent you shined with the technicality here. Nice drop.

Tbh this was a decent battle that had a clashing of styles showcasing what the league has to offer. I really enjoyed the fact that both of you showed and dropped to the best of your abilities. At the end of the day I feel Concrete snatched this one up due to the sheer bulk of work he put into his drop. The idea stayed on point and the rhymes were decently laid out. Candy was on the right track but needed to capitalize on the piece by keeping that flow consistent to keep one drawn in. Dope battle though.

V/concrete

11-23-2020, 06:24 PM	#10
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Candy this was an improvement on last week's showing which made the read worthwhile. I enjoyed the start of your verse the most because it seemed to follow through with the topic at hand. As the verse progressed. I'd say about halfway through it seemed to slowly fall apart. Which is find. It happens from time to time. Your rhyming really begins to shine when you have less pressure on you. I don't know if that was due to your opponent or what but this was a nice showing. Concrete. You really went in with your verse which is great especially considering this is the first verse I can recall reading from you. More often than none the competition seems to be lacking in the league which really makes it boring from time to time. The way you crafted each verse really showcased your ability to carry the topic. Compared to your opponent you shined with the technicality here. Nice drop. Tbh this was a decent battle that had a clashing of styles showcasing what the league has to offer. I really enjoyed the fact that both of you showed and dropped to the best of your abilities. At the end of the day I feel Concrete snatched this one up due to the sheer bulk of work he put into his drop. The idea stayed on point and the rhymes were decently laid out. Candy was on the right track but needed to capitalize on the piece by keeping that flow consistent to keep one drawn in. Dope battle though. V/concrete __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you