Week 1: Universe vs Objective UNIVERSE WINS

Mr. J · 11-16-2020, 11:12 AM

Objective strung together a more telling story in the least amount of stitching as opposed to his opponent, it's not to negate what universe brought but once certain tones are touched upon and strung together it makes a more concrete read.

The second verse is well written but I feel there are nuances brought forth that draw me away and make me focus on other ideologies while trying to keep track of the original concept. It felt more drawn out..there were aspects from the second verse and third verse that could have been taken out and it would most likely get my vote.

But I felt Objective was more keen on the subject this time around weaving together an interesting pattern without using every amount of space given to him. Sometimes less is more and makes a read much more acceptable.

Both did quite well though but I have to give it to Objective

11-16-2020, 11:12 AM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Objective strung together a more telling story in the least amount of stitching as opposed to his opponent, it's not to negate what universe brought but once certain tones are touched upon and strung together it makes a more concrete read. The second verse is well written but I feel there are nuances brought forth that draw me away and make me focus on other ideologies while trying to keep track of the original concept. It felt more drawn out..there were aspects from the second verse and third verse that could have been taken out and it would most likely get my vote. But I felt Objective was more keen on the subject this time around weaving together an interesting pattern without using every amount of space given to him. Sometimes less is more and makes a read much more acceptable. Both did quite well though but I have to give it to Objective __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you