Week 1: Lucipher Howlz vs Johnny 6 feet LUCIPHER WINS

MMLP · 11-16-2020, 06:49 AM

6 feet – I hear ya bro lol, cant wait! I liked the read, technically very sound and well on par with Howlz, although the concept just didn’t land for me and that's the main difference here. I (for example) kinda felt backed in a corner to write a pandemic-type verse with my topic, but with yours it felt needless. Corona verses won't work for me personally (hypocrite warning)! I get the sentiment, were all in the same boat and hopefully yes 2021 society will be more normalised and we’ll all hang out properly but this should be a platform to get away from that reality shit haha. Onwards and upwards. Maybe I’d feel differently reading it another time, who knows!

Howlz – yo that ending made me LOL, twist came seemingly left field, out of nowhere but you read it back and it makes sense! I thought it was gonna drag out to a emotionless verse tbh but I liked it. 1 or 2 phrases were lost me on but overall I like your style, id maybe implement bit more of a structure to your multi placing (internally) to get more a nature flow cuz clearly you can rhyme/ storytell which is hard af to do but otherwise, first of ive read from you. I liked it

Going with Howlz for the more impactful take! Good battle lads!

11-16-2020, 06:49 AM	#11
MMLP Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 614 Battle Record: 15-16 Champed - Write Week 9 Rep Power: 9768091	6 feet – I hear ya bro lol, cant wait! I liked the read, technically very sound and well on par with Howlz, although the concept just didn’t land for me and that's the main difference here. I (for example) kinda felt backed in a corner to write a pandemic-type verse with my topic, but with yours it felt needless. Corona verses won't work for me personally (hypocrite warning)! I get the sentiment, were all in the same boat and hopefully yes 2021 society will be more normalised and we’ll all hang out properly but this should be a platform to get away from that reality shit haha. Onwards and upwards. Maybe I’d feel differently reading it another time, who knows! Howlz – yo that ending made me LOL, twist came seemingly left field, out of nowhere but you read it back and it makes sense! I thought it was gonna drag out to a emotionless verse tbh but I liked it. 1 or 2 phrases were lost me on but overall I like your style, id maybe implement bit more of a structure to your multi placing (internally) to get more a nature flow cuz clearly you can rhyme/ storytell which is hard af to do but otherwise, first of ive read from you. I liked it Going with Howlz for the more impactful take! Good battle lads!