Relationship with God

Pharaohs Army · 10-23-2020, 09:03 PM

Firstly, thanks for your positive feedback on my last keystyle.

Second, this is good because it is authentic. All your pieces I can tell are from your own heart.
However, your terrible grammar at times is too exaggerated and stilts the piece while you're reading.

I have a feeling that half of it is on purpose, and half of it is genuine bad grammar and wording typos. You can clean both sides of them up real quick, and your pieces would be that much better.

10-23-2020, 09:03 PM	#1
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Firstly, thanks for your positive feedback on my last keystyle. Second, this is good because it is authentic. All your pieces I can tell are from your own heart. However, your terrible grammar at times is too exaggerated and stilts the piece while you're reading. I have a feeling that half of it is on purpose, and half of it is genuine bad grammar and wording typos. You can clean both sides of them up real quick, and your pieces would be that much better.