Scar: Damn, this was nice in sections, good imagery and a real nice narration - it read like a section out of an actual book at parts. The highlight was the prose to it, “aged faucets eroded by hail,” etc were deft touches. The format was far from conventional, but it works, defying convention somewhat but still proving effective. There’s definite signs of potential to this, was it maybe too little too late? Only you may really know that, but it certainly felt that from a readers perspective, who knows? You could have been pushed for deadline and forced to submit something quick I guess. This def has its moments though, no where near as bad as some have made out and with a lot to like. On a more technically proficient level than the opponent but that isn’t always the deciding factor for me (though I lean toward it).
Inno stays pulling the rug on those who don’t show up and show out on him. It’s seems he’s the underdog going into a lot of these matches, but he’s got a list of respectable names to his scalps for a reason. I liked the poetic carryovers and tie-ins he had going on in this one, ‘bury the truth, digging for answers,’ is one example from early out the gate. He does that sort of stuff a lot but keeps it subtle and it goes missed by a lot of people I feel. I see you though. I liked the directive, I felt as if you set your stall out early with a clear direction and where you were gonna take it and you did. It was clear cut and delivered sharply, Scar seemed to deliberately avoid that route in search of something bigger but didn’t have the time to develop his piece
Vote - Inno
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07-25-2020, 05:38 AM
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