Playoffs Week One: (2) Letterman vs. (15) Slecht. OPEN FOR FEED

Adverse · 07-12-2020, 03:59 PM

I liked opener it was cool don't think I've seen that one done on him
I don't know about the saga line, over my head?
Had to Google trust the chain but that was a good bar
Cool angle with August Alsina bar good use of current events I had one too lol
Closer was alright kind of wordy, also you used the two fists set up again which was kinda redundant

Thought this was a cool little verse and you had a couple decent bars but I know you can and will have to take it up a notch in later rounds, the competition is only going to get tougher good work Slecht

07-12-2020, 03:59 PM	#1
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	I liked opener it was cool don't think I've seen that one done on him I don't know about the saga line, over my head? Had to Google trust the chain but that was a good bar Cool angle with August Alsina bar good use of current events I had one too lol Closer was alright kind of wordy, also you used the two fists set up again which was kinda redundant Thought this was a cool little verse and you had a couple decent bars but I know you can and will have to take it up a notch in later rounds, the competition is only going to get tougher good work Slecht