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He / Him / His
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Those predictions? Just fiction. But I’m glad I read it
Cus if Adverse the Heavy favourite ima Body Weight like Calisthenics didnt fully get this tbh, unless he has an alias named "Weight/wait" or something similar, which is something you should specify from the jump. The only other alternative is you're saying "I'ma body, wait.." which you should indicate with some kind of punctuation. Either way as a writer, you're responsible for communicating your ideas better to the read. If his name was weight, this would be a good bar, but I can't make that assumption so it's a miss for me The disses he spit are all misses and shit. Guess ya boy is senile Cus his Execution’s bout as smooth as how they did Delacroix in Green Mile ok, seen execution concepts done a lot and this didn't strike me as super original Knifestyles deployed like they’re a lifestyle choice. He bout to cop a hurtin When I cut The Idiot with Bowie like im Iggy Pop in Berlin dope concept, execution could be smoother Yeah I’m Dave, don’t get it backwards - I ain’t-Cha Pal but it’s likely That if you’re Banking on winning this when Azealia fate you gon cry cheat cool Not a Lot to Offer and your Numbers Up, ain’t that some shit So I’m thinking furniture auction - WinChester Draws and the Hammer Clicks concepts cool, executions a little sloppy If that tough guy act is doctored now you committing malpractice You couldn’t have seen AdverseCity less if you were repping Atlantis Nah not really feeling this Born better off means you were never raw When heads were ringing alarms with Tenor Saw Ad was feelin’ alarmed bout Tennis Sores This is ok, I think you're trynna do too much Attending Wimbledon’s the only time he could get Centre Court, he’s bound to lose When I sneak up on Ad Vantage Point and Tie em up on my way to Round Deuce Another one. I'm really not the demographic for tennis bars, but this is ok BITCH so let’s do this! Why’d you join the tourney kid ain’t Gon prove shit I’ll take you out here in the first round, then waste another clip on you just for amusement Nah not feeling this, super antiquated concept and nothing new added in He always had them BIG dreams, a slick ride with the drop-top Signed into the NBL and got his wish….kinda...when Coop took his top off! ok Evad ain't spraying SHIT...he must have got a kink in the line On the other hand this mag fuck up your whole profile...like INC did mine Again, okay. Magazine bars are just incredibly overdone I ain't shooting to kill, put you in a coma when that pistol blow Your wife will have to pull the plug on Dave like she canceled Lil Dicky show ok, could be more creative in the angle Your chick scheming on your well meaning, you ain’t pokin’ but you treat her right I’ll find your girl Dave and Buster in the bathroom for a token and a pizza slice cool idea, executions kinda sloppy. Grammatically this has holes in it on the arcade side of the interpretation overall, I felt like I've seen better from Adverse, so I was a bit disappointed in this drop. Also the fact that he only did 10 lines vs dave's 16 put him at a disadvantage from the jump. That being said, I think Dave got this. He had some good ideas but I think he tries to do way too much with them when it comes to executing. overall mvgt Dave |
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