Verse for Mav

Johnny 6 feet · 05-14-2020, 09:25 PM

Just a good solid brag verse. Off the top? Threw some nice imagery in here too:

"Dig far into my unconscious, plunging to secret levels.
So deep inside my thoughts, I peak upwards and see the devil."

Stand out lines right there. Your vocab was solid. Got the job done. Rhyme scheme went off a little in a line or two but nothing major. This was a quick, easy read. Easy to follow. Stuff like this always puts me in mind of a boxer at the gym hitting the bag.

Keep posting. Please rtf.

-6

05-14-2020, 09:25 PM	#2
Johnny 6 feet Storyteller Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 446 Battle Record: 8-4 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League Rep Power: 5558447	Just a good solid brag verse. Off the top? Threw some nice imagery in here too: "Dig far into my unconscious, plunging to secret levels. So deep inside my thoughts, I peak upwards and see the devil." Stand out lines right there. Your vocab was solid. Got the job done. Rhyme scheme went off a little in a line or two but nothing major. This was a quick, easy read. Easy to follow. Stuff like this always puts me in mind of a boxer at the gym hitting the bag. Keep posting. Please rtf. -6