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05-03-2020, 09:44 PM
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Storyteller
Join Date: May 2020
Posts: 446
Battle Record: 8-4
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Dope. The imagery and use of vocab was crazy in this. You painted a picture of war in a short piece with nothing wasted.
"The arrival tilts the Earth's axis and turns every ministry gothic Battles left physically exhausted...too stoned for infinity gauntlets" Compound rhymes were tight but never forced. It's too easy for writers to go too much or too little with that but you got the balance right. Great job. -6 |
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