Week 5: Contenders Match: Inno vs Scar SCAR WINS

Adverse · 04-26-2020, 06:29 PM

This battle was honestly everything a contenders match should be. A good contrast of styles and two great verses. You both did justice to your topic.

Scar - Very creative topic choice, i liked the way you brought your verse to life by describing the salmon pies (which I've never had but am now craving one after this piece lol) the imagery was there, and as a writer when you can appeal to other senses through description (smell, taste etc) that's just an excellent quality to have as a writer. I felt like i was there, i also like how well disguised your endgame was it didn't really catch me off guard as much as i was just happy with the outcome of it all. It came all together in the end and wrapped up in a nice bow.

Inno - This felt rushed to a certain degree and started off very slow in my eyes, but you picked up a lot of steam as you got deeper into the verse, but this didn't feel like your typical Inno verse. It was just really inconsistent compared to what we're used to seeing. After what you've went through this week with the whole debacle in the champ match, it's understandable.

Going to vote for Scar here, i loved the overall picture he painted and the story he told it was great. Inno just didn't meet his usual standard here had he done so this battle probably would have been better.

V/Scar

Pharaohs Army · 04-27-2020, 12:20 AM

Alright I'll just say it. I can't get into Scar's verses. It's not a personal thing. I'm sure he's a good guy but I am just not captivated by his style, all the way down to the different fonts and italics. So this woman has nostalgia for the salmon pies, and drinks a lot of wine, remembering a lost love and a special date.

I'm not even a great writer and I wouldn't be offended if someone said it about me. It's just a stylistic thing. He's fancy and simple at the same time, but there's no "there" there, so I guess I'm biased. Probably should have just not voted and taken the punishment, but it's good to have different perspectives and votes sometimes.

But Inno's verse here is not that great either, with a few misspellings and it looks like a rush job, particularly the first stanza. Second stanza is better. I'd really like to see better here. Don't know how well you tied in gluttony, some other sins seemed to be sprinkled about. Eating away at their morals for sports good line.

I'm gonna vote Inno here but I really don't want to vote for either. Sorry if that sounds harsh but just how this one went for me.

04-26-2020, 06:29 PM	#1
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	This battle was honestly everything a contenders match should be. A good contrast of styles and two great verses. You both did justice to your topic. Scar - Very creative topic choice, i liked the way you brought your verse to life by describing the salmon pies (which I've never had but am now craving one after this piece lol) the imagery was there, and as a writer when you can appeal to other senses through description (smell, taste etc) that's just an excellent quality to have as a writer. I felt like i was there, i also like how well disguised your endgame was it didn't really catch me off guard as much as i was just happy with the outcome of it all. It came all together in the end and wrapped up in a nice bow. Inno - This felt rushed to a certain degree and started off very slow in my eyes, but you picked up a lot of steam as you got deeper into the verse, but this didn't feel like your typical Inno verse. It was just really inconsistent compared to what we're used to seeing. After what you've went through this week with the whole debacle in the champ match, it's understandable. Going to vote for Scar here, i loved the overall picture he painted and the story he told it was great. Inno just didn't meet his usual standard here had he done so this battle probably would have been better. V/Scar

04-27-2020, 12:20 AM	#2
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Alright I'll just say it. I can't get into Scar's verses. It's not a personal thing. I'm sure he's a good guy but I am just not captivated by his style, all the way down to the different fonts and italics. So this woman has nostalgia for the salmon pies, and drinks a lot of wine, remembering a lost love and a special date. I'm not even a great writer and I wouldn't be offended if someone said it about me. It's just a stylistic thing. He's fancy and simple at the same time, but there's no "there" there, so I guess I'm biased. Probably should have just not voted and taken the punishment, but it's good to have different perspectives and votes sometimes. But Inno's verse here is not that great either, with a few misspellings and it looks like a rush job, particularly the first stanza. Second stanza is better. I'd really like to see better here. Don't know how well you tied in gluttony, some other sins seemed to be sprinkled about. Eating away at their morals for sports good line. I'm gonna vote Inno here but I really don't want to vote for either. Sorry if that sounds harsh but just how this one went for me.