Week 5: Contenders Match: Inno vs Scar SCAR WINS

[Bodey]

Scar- this was a pretty cool read. i liked the image of her eating with a ghost at the end, trying to relive/recreate past times, with the hope of ironically using it as a way to move on. i can see where gluttony comes in the form of indulging a feeling/memory rather than the overeating aspect, which is the first thing i think that comes to most people's minds hearing the word. this was different and i really enjoyed it. the description made it feel like you were actually there

Inno- right off the bat, i thought it was interesting to write from the perspective of the devil himself. definitely saw the gluttonous aspect but it was also intertwined with what i thought was mostly envy. several grammatical errors scattered here and there, which i'm surprised you missed because you've been around for awhile now. but that's okay. definitely liked the 2 last paragraphs as a whole, i noticed that 2nd one was mostly lowercase and i'm not sure if you did that on purpose to make it stand out more than the rest of the piece, which is fine because i thought that was one of the best written parts. i found the end of it cool too, pretty much a dig at this instant-gratification based society we have. the thing is, i feel that this angle has been done many times before, especially bringing in the biblical aspect because after all, it is considered one of the 7 sins.

creativity to me is posting something unexpected, something outside of the box. and i think scar outshined you here doing so. aside from the grammatical hiccups throughout, i still enjoyed your piece for its writing. but i'm giving it to scar here because his drop evoked more emotion for me, and his descriptive imagery was more appealing in my opinion. with that, i'm giving it to scar

v/ scar