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consults Lloyd
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I feel like I should like your writing, but I don't. It feels devoid of emotion and purely academic. It's a mixture of your wordplay style (basic af) combined with the length of your pieces (indicating purpose and effort) that rub me the wrong way as a writer who prides himself on honesty.
It's dishonest in it's insecurity, or to put another way, it's done in a way that seems too deliberate to be so empty. This is more feedback than I've given a piece in a while. That in of itself says something, and I think it's that I see dedication to the craft, but lacking in what I personally enjoy. *pat on the back* |
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a lot of lame wordplays
I-boo-pro-fin's like the Miami Dolphins and the one where Neo's-poor-in were the two worst |
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This was pretty bad. I did like the opening 2 lines tho Went way downhill after that so I stopped reading
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rhyme capsule.
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