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[dull boy]

I feel like I should like your writing, but I don't. It feels devoid of emotion and purely academic. It's a mixture of your wordplay style (basic af) combined with the length of your pieces (indicating purpose and effort) that rub me the wrong way as a writer who prides himself on honesty.

It's dishonest in it's insecurity, or to put another way, it's done in a way that seems too deliberate to be so empty.

This is more feedback than I've given a piece in a while. That in of itself says something, and I think it's that I see dedication to the craft, but lacking in what I personally enjoy.

*pat on the back*

[Pharaohs Army]

a lot of lame wordplays

I-boo-pro-fin's like the Miami Dolphins
and
the one where Neo's-poor-in

were the two worst

[Barcotic]

Originally Posted by Pharaohs Army

a lot of lame wordplays

I-boo-pro-fin's like the Miami Dolphins
and
the one where Neo's-poor-in

were the two worst

Don't forget viking-dens lmao

This was pretty bad. I did like the opening 2 lines tho
Went way downhill after that so I stopped reading

[Eŋg]

Originally Posted by dull boy

I feel like I should like your writing, but I don't. It feels devoid of emotion and purely academic. It's a mixture of your wordplay style (basic af) combined with the length of your pieces (indicating purpose and effort) that rub me the wrong way as a writer who prides himself on honesty.

It's dishonest in it's insecurity, or to put another way, it's done in a way that seems too deliberate to be so empty.

This is more feedback than I've given a piece in a while. That in of itself says something, and I think it's that I see dedication to the craft, but lacking in what I personally enjoy.

*pat on the back*

can you get the fuck out of my mind, articulating my thoughts better than me and shit. you bastard.