Exis & Candy - This Our Shit...

Universe · 02-11-2020, 02:03 PM

I honestly didn't mind Exis' verse here. I liked the speech impediment section. Candy's was a little... over my head, I guess I'll say.

But Exis, this post aside, when I read your stuff it just seems like you rush it. You said it yourself, something along the lines of "I'm every bit as good as all you, I just don't try as hard". I remember seeing that line and being like... "but why don't you"?

Whatever effort you put into your verses... double it. You will see results. You obviously care enough and I can tell you tried a little more here, and it shows. Just hold yourself to a higher standard because let me tell you... the secret to success in any form of writing is patience.

02-11-2020, 02:03 PM	#1
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	I honestly didn't mind Exis' verse here. I liked the speech impediment section. Candy's was a little... over my head, I guess I'll say. But Exis, this post aside, when I read your stuff it just seems like you rush it. You said it yourself, something along the lines of "I'm every bit as good as all you, I just don't try as hard". I remember seeing that line and being like... "but why don't you"? Whatever effort you put into your verses... double it. You will see results. You obviously care enough and I can tell you tried a little more here, and it shows. Just hold yourself to a higher standard because let me tell you... the secret to success in any form of writing is patience. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..