OFFICIAL SINACOG OPEN MIC THREAD

Sinacog · 01-25-2020, 04:28 AM

Fish of light; fish of hope; fish of freedom
Fish of thorns, fish of light; fish of darkness
I am the fish of hope; the fish of water
I am the fish of light; the fish of life
\I am the fish of darkness; the fish of hope
I am the fish of light; the fish of hope
The fish of hope; the fish of light
I am the fish of water; the fish of hope
I am the fish of water; the fish of love
I am the fish of water; the fish of faith

Exis · 01-25-2020, 04:41 AM

Chikety China I don't like fish in my kitchen
Maybe Chop Suey your bitch and pan fry up her liver...

Adverse · 01-26-2020, 01:08 AM

I like the poetic tone of your pieces and though repetition works up to a point, i think you should reiterate only to a certain extent, we get it after the second time. It adds nothing to the piece it just seems like unnecessary filler, get a little more creative.

01-25-2020, 04:28 AM	#1
Sinacog R.Killsbury 3000 Join Date: Dec 2018 Posts: 2,299 Battle Record: 4-25 Rep Power: 8129215	Fish of Light Fish of light; fish of hope; fish of freedom Fish of thorns, fish of light; fish of darkness I am the fish of hope; the fish of water I am the fish of light; the fish of life \I am the fish of darkness; the fish of hope I am the fish of light; the fish of hope The fish of hope; the fish of light I am the fish of water; the fish of hope I am the fish of water; the fish of love I am the fish of water; the fish of faith

01-25-2020, 04:41 AM	#2
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Chikety China I don't like fish in my kitchen Maybe Chop Suey your bitch and pan fry up her liver...

01-26-2020, 01:08 AM	#3
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	I like the poetic tone of your pieces and though repetition works up to a point, i think you should reiterate only to a certain extent, we get it after the second time. It adds nothing to the piece it just seems like unnecessary filler, get a little more creative.