digital orgasm, plz

Vulgar · 06-10-2013, 02:58 AM

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Geno · 06-10-2013, 07:07 PM

This piece is flooded with fucking lol qoutables

john malkovich’s serious face worn like a masquerade helmet

ran an aerialtrain on her til she was moaning ‘taxi!’ to the skies

harbinger academy - daughter of the macabees "ill go down on you, mr. robot but it’ll cost a dollar for the battered knees”

^ill as fuck btw.

Has more qoutables but grapped those off the top. Nice drop vulgar, always a refreshingthread from you.

Atr

Objective · 06-11-2013, 03:27 PM

Dope drop as always Vulgar. Fuled with metaphores, rich language, humor and amazing descriptions along with a easy to follow flow and rhymescheme. The opening four lines was dope as fuck. Great storytelling from beginning to end. Probably among the best pieces I've read from you imo.

Keep it up.

Joel Venom · 06-11-2013, 05:39 PM

keep it up vulgar, your still a beast

06-12-2013, 01:28 PM

lol entertaining...and ur wordchoice was dope af
sometimes i feel ur style gets to fragmented, but although some fragmentation, and change of tenses did occur, itself remained themed, and those breaks were of true creative license imo, so it still worked...
but things like 'operatic oganism and conduit cabage...and octopus krav maga, matinee menance, cabranet welches' are fuckin dope word choices/combinaations...adjective noun choices were dope and the highlight of the pc for me...
i did enjoy this, and felt it to be one of ur better drops that i've read...and u deff have ur own style that u clearly owned here..
btw flow was pretty much fluid for me, along with the scheming.
way to stay true to ur name.
dope, vulgar.

Mr. J · 06-14-2013, 11:30 AM

This was a nice piece all around, I feel your vocab is a great attachment
but at times when you fit all the syllables into the piece..and then throw a comma here
a period there, it kind of tosses me off, strictly based off the extra usage of words
other than that you really drew me in with the whole idea of this piece
you still have that touch....to be honest....I enjoyed the names w/ miscellanous items
nice drop though...keep writing

Eviscerate · 06-14-2013, 11:50 AM

this fucked up my head :O

dont even know how to properly respond right now.

Vulgar · 07-03-2013, 12:45 AM

Thanks for the feedback, all. Last up.

Eŋg · 07-03-2013, 04:00 PM

i honestly think, if writing is a reflection of its author, that you are borderline insane. i mean this was crazy, for what it was. and then objectively quite mad, too. your lexical base is respectably vast, and arguably overdone in execution... but that's entirely you, and your style. verbosity is/can be a double -edged sword, in my humble opinion, but it embodies the structural, inexorable resilience you pen with... it allows creation of these obscure threads of polysyllabic congruence, while the core of your writing is an unassailable non-sense so confident in its poise, it begins to convince you it's intelligible. it's equal parts mesmerizing and repulsive. do you take (many) drugs? i believe i caught the gist of this piece, it comes in peace, tongue-in-cheek, on the rotating kebab skewer sitting a perfect equidistance between Angels and Demons, on the spectrum of causation. or something. shout outs to butter pecan Rican, ofc.

in summation: i liked it, you off-key banana bastard.

MACCABEES

hit me back, i've only got one thread up.

pz.

Coup · 07-03-2013, 10:23 PM

Laitin vulgate...let's colab on some Shakespeare abstracitcus some time

06-10-2013, 02:58 AM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	digital orgasm, plz o Last edited by Vulgar; 12-03-2021 at 09:40 PM.

06-10-2013, 07:07 PM	#2
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	This piece is flooded with fucking lol qoutables john malkovich’s serious face worn like a masquerade helmet ran an aerialtrain on her til she was moaning ‘taxi!’ to the skies harbinger academy - daughter of the macabees "ill go down on you, mr. robot but it’ll cost a dollar for the battered knees” ^ill as fuck btw. Has more qoutables but grapped those off the top. Nice drop vulgar, always a refreshingthread from you. Atr __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

06-11-2013, 03:27 PM	#3
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,868 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474192	Dope drop as always Vulgar. Fuled with metaphores, rich language, humor and amazing descriptions along with a easy to follow flow and rhymescheme. The opening four lines was dope as fuck. Great storytelling from beginning to end. Probably among the best pieces I've read from you imo. Keep it up. __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o

06-14-2013, 11:30 AM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was a nice piece all around, I feel your vocab is a great attachment but at times when you fit all the syllables into the piece..and then throw a comma here a period there, it kind of tosses me off, strictly based off the extra usage of words other than that you really drew me in with the whole idea of this piece you still have that touch....to be honest....I enjoyed the names w/ miscellanous items nice drop though...keep writing __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

06-14-2013, 11:50 AM	#7
Eviscerate stokely carmichael of rap Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 144 Rep Power: 3155074	this fucked up my head :O dont even know how to properly respond right now. __________________ i used to do that here..

06-11-2013, 05:39 PM	#4
Joel Venom Galaxy Child Join Date: Jun 2013 Location: Raleigh, NC Posts: 137 Rep Power: 37	keep it up vulgar, your still a beast

06-12-2013, 01:28 PM	#5
Rawn M.D. Guest Posts: n/a	lol entertaining...and ur wordchoice was dope af sometimes i feel ur style gets to fragmented, but although some fragmentation, and change of tenses did occur, itself remained themed, and those breaks were of true creative license imo, so it still worked... but things like 'operatic oganism and conduit cabage...and octopus krav maga, matinee menance, cabranet welches' are fuckin dope word choices/combinaations...adjective noun choices were dope and the highlight of the pc for me... i did enjoy this, and felt it to be one of ur better drops that i've read...and u deff have ur own style that u clearly owned here.. btw flow was pretty much fluid for me, along with the scheming. way to stay true to ur name. dope, vulgar.

07-03-2013, 12:45 AM	#8
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Thanks for the feedback, all. Last up.

07-03-2013, 04:00 PM	#9
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	i honestly think, if writing is a reflection of its author, that you are borderline insane. i mean this was crazy, for what it was. and then objectively quite mad, too. your lexical base is respectably vast, and arguably overdone in execution... but that's entirely you, and your style. verbosity is/can be a double -edged sword, in my humble opinion, but it embodies the structural, inexorable resilience you pen with... it allows creation of these obscure threads of polysyllabic congruence, while the core of your writing is an unassailable non-sense so confident in its poise, it begins to convince you it's intelligible. it's equal parts mesmerizing and repulsive. do you take (many) drugs? i believe i caught the gist of this piece, it comes in peace, tongue-in-cheek, on the rotating kebab skewer sitting a perfect equidistance between Angels and Demons, on the spectrum of causation. or something. shout outs to butter pecan Rican, ofc. in summation: i liked it, you off-key banana bastard. MACCABEES hit me back, i've only got one thread up. pz. Last edited by Eŋg; 11-06-2013 at 12:47 AM.

07-03-2013, 10:23 PM	#10
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	Laitin vulgate...let's colab on some Shakespeare abstracitcus some time __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.