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Mike Wrecka · 01-28-2013, 04:05 PM

no doubt split. I really liked what you did here. as always it was the vibe u created that I enjoyed.

the structure of your bars is sometimes confusing to me tbh. you have inner rhymes and sometimes the ending of each line doesn't rhyme with the last word of the preceding line but it rhymes with other parts. lmao. it mostly works out in the end but it feels like ur a long bar head formatting in short bar. or maybe ur just trying to be too complex. it flows really well just doesn't read smooth to me if that makes any sense.

but with that being said I could see the talent shining through. ur choice of rhymes and words is strong. and content wise im always digging ur stuff man. great imagery. and this was like machine gun rap. meaning its an fast paced meter. and I like that.

good stuff split. I enjoyed this.

01-28-2013, 04:05 PM	#7
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	no doubt split. I really liked what you did here. as always it was the vibe u created that I enjoyed. the structure of your bars is sometimes confusing to me tbh. you have inner rhymes and sometimes the ending of each line doesn't rhyme with the last word of the preceding line but it rhymes with other parts. lmao. it mostly works out in the end but it feels like ur a long bar head formatting in short bar. or maybe ur just trying to be too complex. it flows really well just doesn't read smooth to me if that makes any sense. but with that being said I could see the talent shining through. ur choice of rhymes and words is strong. and content wise im always digging ur stuff man. great imagery. and this was like machine gun rap. meaning its an fast paced meter. and I like that. good stuff split. I enjoyed this.