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Old 02-08-2019, 02:27 PM   #1
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U in the lion's den.



U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field
AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil
If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake
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Old 02-08-2019, 06:47 PM   #2
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I aint racist butt ill beat yo black ass. U’ll get bodied in the street bum
No wonder white eyes are always on you, we wish we cud return u to Africa for a refund
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All that “fuck 12” shit is dyin’ wen we meet. Ur Hands up cryin’ as u plea
Racist cops smilin’ at me, so it’s only natural we shoot u in ur back while you flee
MISS
U bag hoes who are slimy and hella fat. Double chins & triple backs
All the fish in the sea n ur fuckin tht? U’ll end up w a whale for a daughter like Mr. Krabs
MISS
I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
HIT
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
HIT
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
MISS
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave
MISS
LONG SHOTTY! If it dnt finish em off I aint worried - my dawgs got me
Or drag a scalpel down his chest.. it’ll open up body at the morgue like an autopsy!
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Originally Posted by BodySnatcher View Post
U in the lion's den.



U ain't built For Battling…so fuck any wordplay u yield,
Cuz u won't get a vote of confidence after this poll survey the field
OK
AK felt the guns bark cuz I don't have a hesitant beagle,
Now I’ma let these ‘dogs come thru UR window’ like Resident Evil
Ok
If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
MISS
There’s a fat chance this pig be eating loud as a bitch,
I bet Zelph be ‘hovering over the plate’ like batter crowdin the pitch
MISS
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
MISS
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
OK
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
MISS
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake
OK
v. BodySnatcher...those opening bars from zelph were a no go for me. the comparing penis bar was weird. Almost gave you the black girl weave line but the tie ins were eh. You had some bangers but REALLY bad misses. Body snatcher had really good wording throughout nothing nasty but a lot ok/light hits. Some were better than other but his misses were way better than Zelphs.
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Old 02-10-2019, 05:40 PM   #3
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I’m at ur house w the goons, anyone comin’ outside will get got - I swear it
& if u pussies wnt come out ill have animals circling over the crib like a baby carriage
The Nina has no favorites, she’ll destroy anyone just to take ur heart
A ratchet’ll end ur marriage.. and the side piece will tear ur family apart
His next girl compared our penis pics, I knew then to finger the hoe for a fuck
Your photos were such a reduction in size it took a thumbnail to open her up
Ur on that fat girl steez, totin the ratchet like “that’s my speed”
Bitch plz.. ima wig on body w/ clips to the head like black girl weave





If ur in ‘arms reach’ then I’ma make ur fuckin jaw spin,
Or I’ll ‘breath fire’ & have u scorch by a flame thrower like Dhalsim
This dirty cop is in a bloody mess. It’s a Twister scene,
But if I let a ‘bald head clean up the situation’ it won’t be Mr. Clean
U look like a horse cop so I'ma leave a rival headless,
Until all we see is ur 'skull hanging by ur chest' like a tribal necklace
Nigga I'ma fuckin animal. I got the crown in this battle,
U want beef? I’ll ‘pull up w/a Longhorn’ like a rancher roundin up cattle
If the blade leaves his ‘uppercut’ I bet this chump break,
Cuz a ‘clean shot’ will ‘lift him off his feet’ like jumpin at a pump fake



mad close cuz zunto had some better hits but i got body with an extra hit

body
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Old 02-10-2019, 06:32 PM   #4
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I thought both verses were pretty dope. Lots of creativity, humor, punches etc. This isn't my realm at all so I might be very off with my vote but I got Body edging it.

Even tho I understand why Zunto went for penis pics instead of dick pics the line sounded a bit weird to me, beside of that it was fire.
Felt a bit uneasy about the white eyes on you line, might have just been me being a cringy white boy and overthinking "is he going over the edge or not?" Thought the following couplet was cool tho as it didn't seem as generic to me with the "go back to Africa"-bit if I should leave out the uneasiness. Enjoyed the flow throughout, overall a great verse I smiled here and there at, ok closure and a couple heavy hitters. 7.5/10

In terms of Body I definitely enjoyed the gaming references and the way they were set up (fuck those dogs tho), set ups and flow. Didn't stumble upon any lines I questioned as much and I guess that is what determined it for me as overall it's pretty close and I definitely enjoyed reading what you guys came up with. Good shit.

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