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02-01-2019, 01:40 PM
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Upset Champion
Join Date: Jan 2013
Location: West Mids
Posts: 3,861
Battle Record: 57-49
Accomplishments - 50 Wins
Champed - BA Rookie Tourney
- 1-2 Punch League (x2)
- Pandemonium Cypher
- 1-2 Punch league Season 9
Rep Power: 24894581   |
Vote ryno
Incred, your half way there but your execution is off in both wording and direct brutal fucking harshness. Like what I mean by that is I wanna read a bar and be left with an emotion. I want to be one of the following Haha funny Ohhh nasty AHH that was clever Etc. Your concepts are in there you just need to develop how your going to then word them to get me as the reader to one of those responses. Even just one or two bars like that an it changes the entire read of your verse. Anyway Vote ry
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