I got jerked vs Cred - Page 2

DMS · 01-31-2019, 10:33 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Wear Shhh

There’s an urban legend type shit where you’ll automatically die on your 1000th cut

I know this because I’m DMS

Death by 1,000 cuts is also a Chinese Hell

I believe you may see the connections

Plus the bar references the idiom in its structure

SHECK WES · 01-31-2019, 10:39 PM

Yea

bleak · 01-31-2019, 10:46 PM

What does a Chinese idiom have to do with a DJ? Are u connecting Chinese people with cats?

Geno · 01-31-2019, 10:49 PM

Dooky

Sharp · 01-31-2019, 11:16 PM

Opener was coo. Cred's circle the block bar was better. Keeping it 100, on that Chinese shit, I'm not a fan of that many quotes in a bar. One, maybe two, okay, but that many makes it clunky to me. On top of that, if you need your reader to understand a centuries old Chinese torture to be able to fully understand your bar, that's on you. Here's the idioms you're up against:

At least make it clear what I should Google by making that the emphasis. No one could quote the bar because it trips over itself before really landing

Diode · 01-31-2019, 11:18 PM

Wording was Diode-esque

No thx

bleak · 02-01-2019, 12:00 AM

http://www.netcees.org/forumdisplay.php?f=70

Not a troll, ur at the level where this will take you to the next

All the stickies

~RustyGunZ~ · 02-01-2019, 12:22 AM

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=6169

Good resource too

Destroyer · 02-01-2019, 12:52 AM

Garbage verse and zelph should die as usual

El Muffin · 02-01-2019, 10:58 PM

Cred it karma was pretty cool I guess

Even tho it's slightly forced

El Muffin · 02-01-2019, 10:59 PM

I've seen way better dome/ saint lines

The rest of the verse aside from credit karma was booty tbh

Blue Bayou · 02-01-2019, 11:02 PM

Cred's Kiki dancebar will forever ruin any arms swingin / body references for me

shit was dope & cant be topped

Dope girl · 02-01-2019, 11:03 PM

Look, everyone has different cup of tea I respect that.

~RustyGunZ~ · 02-01-2019, 11:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blue Bayou

Cred's Kiki dancebar will forever ruin any arms swingin / body references for me

shit was dope & cant be topped

What was it? Did one myself when that dropped but can't remember what verse

Blue Bayou · 02-01-2019, 11:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Knucklehead

What was it? Did one myself when that dropped but can't remember what verse

@Cred

I cant remember the exact line cuz im fukked... but I remember writing "u'll get the picture, once ur heart opens up like a personal locket' line & thinking poty... then he dropped his and I was like fuck me

~RustyGunZ~ · 02-01-2019, 11:15 PM

word I found it, was against Bar in the 1-2 must be why i never saw it

Blue Bayou · 02-01-2019, 11:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Knucklehead

word I found it, was against Bar in the 1-2 must be why i never saw it

repost?

~RustyGunZ~ · 02-01-2019, 11:32 PM

Got a drum n don’t need a band. Twin glocks won’t let this geek advance
Squeeze the cans. 2 arms put that heart outside ur chest like the Keke dance

such slick wording, I knew it as the shiggy challenge but did a heart out your chest flip, was struggling on how to word it and he nailed it

Blue Bayou · 02-01-2019, 11:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Knucklehead

Got a drum n don’t need a band. Twin glocks won’t let this geek advance
Squeeze the cans. 2 arms put that heart outside ur chest like the Keke dance

such slick wording, I knew it as the shiggy challenge but did a heart out your chest flip, was struggling on how to word it and he nailed it

yeahh that's so dope

I remember Bar having a cool line as well, but not to that extent

quick 12? u were always good for a dope quick 6..

~RustyGunZ~ · 02-01-2019, 11:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Blue Bayou

yeahh that's so dope

I remember Bar having a cool line as well, but not to that extent

quick 12? u were always good for a dope quick 6..

i'm supposed to write for bar tonight lol

wanna do a match next week in SOL since our last one was a tie

01-31-2019, 10:49 PM	#24
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Sharp HE / HIM / FRAC Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: PA Posts: 11,592 Battle Record: 56-21 Accomplishments - 50+ Wins Champed - The Ultimate Writer - NBL Cypher - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 12601538	Opener was coo. Cred's circle the block bar was better. Keeping it 100, on that Chinese shit, I'm not a fan of that many quotes in a bar. One, maybe two, okay, but that many makes it clunky to me. On top of that, if you need your reader to understand a centuries old Chinese torture to be able to fully understand your bar, that's on you. Here's the idioms you're up against: At least make it clear what I should Google by making that the emphasis. No one could quote the bar because it trips over itself before really landing

02-01-2019, 11:03 PM	#33
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