Spring Turns Winter

Sinacog · 01-30-2019, 08:09 PM

I thought this was a good read, DMS.

You had a good out-line of this topic; - had all the essentials for a good topical piece. You didn't really stray away from your topic; - which was nice. I enjoyed your subtle imagery; and prose like writing. I enjoy this metaphor you brought us on - was quite riveting. With you being upstairs; and the basement being a scary place. Nice one. Good poetic prose, near the end. I enjoyed this a lot more than your previous written. Good work, you could up your vocabulary; and maybe use even more imagery. But this was fine...niice one..good work...keep writing!

01-30-2019, 08:09 PM	#2
Sinacog R.Killsbury 3000 Join Date: Dec 2018 Posts: 2,299 Battle Record: 4-25 Rep Power: 8129215	I thought this was a good read, DMS. You had a good out-line of this topic; - had all the essentials for a good topical piece. You didn't really stray away from your topic; - which was nice. I enjoyed your subtle imagery; and prose like writing. I enjoy this metaphor you brought us on - was quite riveting. With you being upstairs; and the basement being a scary place. Nice one. Good poetic prose, near the end. I enjoyed this a lot more than your previous written. Good work, you could up your vocabulary; and maybe use even more imagery. But this was fine...niice one..good work...keep writing! Last edited by Sinacog; 01-30-2019 at 08:12 PM.