The Ferris Wheel Of Fate

Sinacog · 01-30-2019, 03:14 PM

Hello, Vlad. Good read here, was quite elatious and grandeur. Nice work.

Overall - I thought this was a good topical piece. It had all the essentials for a good narrative, with good imagery, and enticing narrative. I enjoyed your subtle story-telling; - was quite nice. It was kind of sad to read about..but it was quite good. You don't really tell us why your mom was crying in the story...but that's okay..it was still quite good. Nice use of carrying along a story. Was quite nice. overall - good work man. Enjoyed this piece. Good work, keep writing!

01-30-2019, 03:14 PM	#8
Sinacog R.Killsbury 3000 Join Date: Dec 2018 Posts: 2,299 Battle Record: 4-25 Rep Power: 8129215	Hello, Vlad. Good read here, was quite elatious and grandeur. Nice work. Overall - I thought this was a good topical piece. It had all the essentials for a good narrative, with good imagery, and enticing narrative. I enjoyed your subtle story-telling; - was quite nice. It was kind of sad to read about..but it was quite good. You don't really tell us why your mom was crying in the story...but that's okay..it was still quite good. Nice use of carrying along a story. Was quite nice. overall - good work man. Enjoyed this piece. Good work, keep writing!