Objective Dreams #1

[Vulgar]

I had a dream about a pornstar recently...but it wasn't as harmonious or scenic as this one. Your writing has generally improved as you are making strides at patiently weaving a storyline. Nothing too choppy except for repeating words sometimes like 'dancing' - other synonyms might help to get some variety going.

Keep doing you

[Objective]

Originally Posted by Vulgar

I had a dream about a pornstar recently...but it wasn't as harmonious or scenic as this one. Your writing has generally improved as you are making strides at patiently weaving a storyline. Nothing too choppy except for repeating words sometimes like 'dancing' - other synonyms might help to get some variety going.

Keep doing you

Definately. Thanks a lot for the honest feed. That's basicly what these Objective Dreams pieces is going to be about. They'll be focused on dreams I've had, yet I'm going to try to make them interesting and get better at describing emotions, hold a specific storyline and be able to visualize ''weird'' and ''different'' atmospheres/sceneries to others.

I try to stay away from repeating words so that's a newbie mistake by me. Good looks on the feed Vulgar.