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06-25-2018, 01:35 AM
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yeet
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I fk w/ both of these, both are grimy. I think you bad some extra filler words here Jabari in the setup.
Choppa out to fold opps, aim at noggins and smoke tops Something like this achieves the same thing and doesn't take away from the punch in picky eyes. But the concept was fire. Cred w/ usual shit, very effective in a small space and I think it helps in 1-2 shit. HOWEVER, I think it may have been a bit predictable here. Gun bars are ur thing I get it but you could have taken it a separate direction than about Z cause that shit is dead imo V/JB
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