WK7: Incredible 1-2 vs.Cereal 1-0 - Incredible WINS!!

[Bongo Bear]

Originally Posted by Incredible

You got caution wrapped around you but not for the right things, this a closed scene
Cause when my shots buck its going in... now your quiet, I'm the opposing team

Alright, this is a nice setup.

My stick shoots hockey pucks out for my protection, call it my goalie
Get caught at a stand still but make his body move as if his wipers are on full speed

This is good, felt like it could've been worded better. I like how all these lines sort of connect to each other

I gotta device that works in my whip not for picking up passagers tho
I'll shed light on the subject of you getting murdered, just watch this massacre glow!

This is ok. It's light, but I liked it.

They'll say its a statement & NO statement bars!!
He like "just try to walk in my shoes", but he'd realize we're right about him, if he walked in ours

This is alright, Nice sting but it could've hit harder.

Got nada for ur name, I'll just punch you in the nose have you running to cry home
Only thing I have against this shitty name since I typed it for the mag...its saved in my phone

I'm kind of confused by this, I assume it's supposed to be intimidating because I didn't really see a punch or a second meaning. If it is i'd probably tie it in with the last line in terms of quality

Edit: I got it now.

My style is in its golden state, you date back to the cavaliers, I'm not a worrier
I fucked ur bitch while standing 4 times in a row and never let the Cavs Warrior

I feel like this was kind of weak for a finishing line.

I aint inta biting, though Jack Jack is nuts..
I might as well cover him violet And claim a CRIMSON river as such..

A Incredibles scheme could've had heavy potential. I'm not feeling the way you used this at all though.

Such is, i am down with the Dis-in/uncle,..
fact Chris Bennoit is still waiting for Incredible Hart and family to BUCKLE..

I like the second part.

BUt wait there is more, i bust 'rounds like buck shots in the reign ---
ALL fire--- this way for DUMBO leaked by a peanut's hands i cap him 'n put the feather back in place..

I like this kind of. Fell flat to me but, I see how it had potential.

Dust of the plate this HOLMES is coming home
I'll run through this puncho like i would receive a pack of smokes..

Didn't like this.

I'll'a'tar'raison aside i plan to spit in Incredible's mouth
just so when i read this back "it comes out as a SPEAK & SPELL" sound

Didn't like this

I think both needed work on connecting and wording the bars better.
My vote is for Incredible. He was more cohesive to me.

[DMS]

Cereal had simpler rhyme schemes, and other fundamentals.

V/ Incredible