random bars

Mr. J · 06-04-2018, 02:39 AM

@Darker Ego, one more outburst & Im slapping a fine on your head bruh.
I dont know how to do it yet, but Ill figure it out you cornball...

Hey man, the guy that wrote this

I thought this was dope...you got some smooth flows son.
the wording was on point and the back & forth transitioning was slick
overall this was a great piece to just enjoy imo.
random indeed but worth the read.

Pharaohs Army · 06-08-2018, 07:07 PM

Your good at rhyming multi's. But I agree with CopyPat you need some better words.

Some of your phrasing is very basic and just trying to complete a rhyme without making sense.

That being said you can continue a scheme for quite a while so I can see your talents.

06-04-2018, 02:39 AM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	@Darker Ego, one more outburst & Im slapping a fine on your head bruh. I dont know how to do it yet, but Ill figure it out you cornball... Hey man, the guy that wrote this I thought this was dope...you got some smooth flows son. the wording was on point and the back & forth transitioning was slick overall this was a great piece to just enjoy imo. random indeed but worth the read. __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

06-08-2018, 07:07 PM	#2
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Your good at rhyming multi's. But I agree with CopyPat you need some better words. Some of your phrasing is very basic and just trying to complete a rhyme without making sense. That being said you can continue a scheme for quite a while so I can see your talents.