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02-21-2018, 01:59 PM
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need some improvement, flow was real choppy, shorten up the syllable count per line and focus on condensing them to fit in smooth multis, which you also need to work on.. content was decent, just get the rhymes, multis and structure down and you can elevate reeeal quick, keep it up!
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