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01-11-2018, 07:27 PM
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βгοкε ㄴεςηαг
Join Date: Jun 2013
Posts: 2,245
Battle Record: 9-4
Champed - 1-2 Punch League
Rep Power: 12760964   |
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i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood #truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant |
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01-14-2018, 05:29 PM
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Senior Member
Join Date: Mar 2013
Posts: 910
Battle Record: 4-4
Rep Power: 7502715 |
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Got a sex life like a darts match....even with the hookers he needs double to check outfat wife Heh Ya girls known as a slut, there's no foreplay or chasefat wife Ya boys are so quick to tag in each other, they call it a relay racefat wife Missed this it was a good concept Avoids the top 25, battling the wack heads for all the durationfat wife He's only known to rape an extra on site, he's like a Steven seagal allegation Okay Dudes a terrible mod, beat a nobody with his past rhymefat wife Your comeback will only last a week, which is the same time you killed the NBL last time Lol okay Plus he's killing RB, boring everyone with the lyrics he'll find and dispatch He didn't just put the nail in the coffin over there, he wrote 30 lines in that final match Lol Oh that site battle u ran.... a disaster with the crowd that knew I'm not just saying you're a cancer to these sites, I'm saying Dia would be proud of u Okay V broke |
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01-15-2018, 05:24 AM
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Badgerdick
Join Date: Jul 2015
Location: Showdown City
Posts: 2,633
Battle Record: 11-2
Champed - Art of Writing League
Rep Power: 22685552 |
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LOL @ nausea slouch, that didn't work for me tbh, too far a stretch even though i see what you were doing with it. Ransomware was dope to me though, and fresh, don't think I've seen that done. Flapdoodle again was kind of original to me BUT I didn't feel like the line really had enough impact to really sting as it landed, it could have been harsher. StarFaggot was an okay personal with wordplay but again it could have been worded to hit harder. I didn't feel the diphtheria line but the closer was cool. I think when your wordplay is on, it's ON but other times it can also work against you man and this verse has highs and lows where that happens at diff points. It's a solid verse, just maybe a little inconsistent in terms of wording to really damage your opponent and fuck them up lol Defiant: I thought the darts match line was cool and funny, I wasn't so keen on relay race as again I like harsh sounding punches that seem to destroy the opponent. To be honest I wasn't feeling a great deal from the rest of your verse, I understand they're personal punches and whatnot but they're very statementish with no real sting to them, you know? The nail in the coffin/30 line finals was a bit of clowning but it needed more from you and it just kind of tailed off toward the end for me here. Broke got it on consistency. |
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