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The Clown Prince
Join Date: Apr 2013
Posts: 5,046
Battle Record: 35-45
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Asylum, nice to see you back, I thought your verse was pretty smooth
havent lost your touch but your choice in topic has left me confused. i dont know what you are going for and thats what scares me at the end of the day. maybe because I can see what you are trying to do but it didnt pan out so well. perhaps if you extended on your piece I would have a better grasp on it. about lines 4 through 8 I start to enjoy it because of how you toy with the flow. but then some of it seems to turn into a misguided concept that should be chopped either way I felt this was pretty well done to come off of during a hiatus.. Diablo, Every week it seems you come up with a fresh new concept to bring to the table. its not often you see someone do that, after last weeks battle I hoped youd bring some heat. this was a cool drop, the flow is always concise when you drop as well. I am not one for dialogue but you have a pretty good grasp on what you are trying to convey. I think the interesting part is where you touch on some wording that people rarely think of. which adds to your ability of dropping so rapidly, I really enjoyed the rasped/zapped idea. dope verse. v/Im going to have to give this one to Diablo. the bulk of his verse surpassed what asylum pulled off in his I enjoyed both verses though
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