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Old 01-09-2018, 12:49 AM   #7
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Greetings, gentlemen.

This is a pretty even match and very short perspectives on both sides. I believe this is the closer of all the completed match ups this week and I like the perspectives that you both presented here. Beautiful pic for a topic by the way. Symetrik, I liked the flow of your piece and I think in terms of word choice, you were slightly better, the way you stung everything together and still had such a smooth read through was impressive. Your verse was very descriptive, you touched more on the image itself and it was very well done and I liked the second part because it almost summarized the descriptions of the first half. Innovator, your piece was the complete opposite of Sym's, because where he was more in touch in describing the image at face value, your piece went a deeper route and I felt overall, the soft, poetic feel of your verse really brought a nice perspective of the image. Your first line really reeled me in, "kaleidoscope eyelids flicker/blinking brightly" and you sprinkle these nice little thoughts throughout your piece.

This is the best match up, it's pretty even, very short pieces but very well written and presented in two different perspectives. My decision comes down to the one I felt had a more complete overall piece, and with that I'd have to say Innovator edged it out by a hair, but overall, I liked what I read from both competitors.

MVGT: Innovator.

Good job, gentlemen.
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