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Eŋg · 11-16-2017, 10:20 PM

the first 8 or 9 lines (a speck of the overall verse) stymied a few attempts in reading this. even having done so a handful of times, they don't quite come together for me - but it matters naught.

everything else was stellar.

let’s all huddle around the baggage carousel until we depart
what bothers me is the converging of a million souls living apart

that's something i'd say, but i wouldn't quite as adroitly.

thanks for the read.

11-16-2017, 10:20 PM	#5
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	the first 8 or 9 lines (a speck of the overall verse) stymied a few attempts in reading this. even having done so a handful of times, they don't quite come together for me - but it matters naught. everything else was stellar. let’s all huddle around the baggage carousel until we depart what bothers me is the converging of a million souls living apart that's something i'd say, but i wouldn't quite as adroitly. thanks for the read.