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[Natural]

This isn't very good. I don'tt know if your diss toc"A True Emcee" was suppose to be so subtle or not but it definitely wasn't very impactful. It was a push if anything. You need punches if your gonna try and diss someone or their piece.

The rhymes were random and kinda just thrown out there.
My advice to you is to try and use perfect rhymes for a little while and see how it works for you.
Your slant rhymes are just out there.

[KennyCerealBowl]

Originally Posted by Natural

This isn't very good. I don'tt know if your diss toc"A True Emcee" was suppose to be so subtle or not but it definitely wasn't very impactful. It was a push if anything. You need punches if your gonna try and diss someone or their piece.

The rhymes were random and kinda just thrown out there.
My advice to you is to try and use perfect rhymes for a little while and see how it works for you.
Your slant rhymes are just out there.

I wasn't trying to really diss true mc just push like you said.
and i'm working on my slant rhymes and assonants.

[Split]

Originally Posted by KennyCerealBowl

I wasn't trying to really diss true mc just push like you said.
and i'm working on my slant rhymes and assonants.

Your slant rhymes won't work unless your perfect rhymes/ multis work


Your first assignment

Write a piece with the following scheme pattern

A...B
A...B
B...C
B...C
C....D
C...D
D....E

Until you get to letter H. The rhymes must be multis, syllables must match

So

Backwards fit/ half perfect
Running congested/ fun intervention

Would both be fine

You can have filler where the "..." are but the lines must all have the same syllable count to within 3 syllables throughout the piece

No extra internal rhymes

THIS IS DUE 06/05/2013
Good luck