Building and Destroying.

Mr. J · 05-22-2013, 12:20 AM

This was pretty nice, I was feeling the ending more than the beginning
not quite sure where you edited it at but I knew of some spots I enjoyed well

Astrology neglects physical concepts.
Advanced yet they're Reprisal has no index.
Were on the boundary of what I speak of,
Life and death.
Adam and Eve the beginning and last breathes.
I see life, a jungle taking steps

^^^^
this was nice
so was the pyramid thing
other than that I felt this was done nicely
felt like you were just edging it out here and there
so I can't give it it's proper due..due to editing
but I enjoyed this keep it up

05-22-2013, 12:20 AM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was pretty nice, I was feeling the ending more than the beginning not quite sure where you edited it at but I knew of some spots I enjoyed well Astrology neglects physical concepts. Advanced yet they're Reprisal has no index. Were on the boundary of what I speak of, Life and death. Adam and Eve the beginning and last breathes. I see life, a jungle taking steps ^^^^ this was nice so was the pyramid thing other than that I felt this was done nicely felt like you were just edging it out here and there so I can't give it it's proper due..due to editing but I enjoyed this keep it up