Promised Land

Maximus · 11-30-2016, 06:12 AM

word up man, this was quite a refreshing drop to me... the intro is captivating and sets the foundation for rest of the piece
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I've been dubbed depressive for my demoralizing message,
Like I'm flawed cause I don't embrace the wreckage.
Or hug the menace.I thrive at building. But the lie alight is winning.
There aint no victor on Earth when the price of rye is killing.
I'm up for closure now. For all our kidding
There's a stinking odor to this time we live in.
....nice stanzas, love ur wording
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from childhood up we're all brewed up in envy.
It's poured out in vials used to poison our enjoyment.
Employment. Debt. Death. Swapping poignance for pennies.
.....word, i cherish this section, lol.. dope
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overall this wasn't boring at all, i like ur wording and have no issues with this at all, flowed nicely to me.. cool man, stay up..one

11-30-2016, 06:12 AM	#1
Maximus Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 923 Battle Record: 25-26 Champed - NBL Cypher Rep Power: 11169472	word up man, this was quite a refreshing drop to me... the intro is captivating and sets the foundation for rest of the piece . . I've been dubbed depressive for my demoralizing message, Like I'm flawed cause I don't embrace the wreckage. Or hug the menace.I thrive at building. But the lie alight is winning. There aint no victor on Earth when the price of rye is killing. I'm up for closure now. For all our kidding There's a stinking odor to this time we live in. ....nice stanzas, love ur wording . . from childhood up we're all brewed up in envy. It's poured out in vials used to poison our enjoyment. Employment. Debt. Death. Swapping poignance for pennies. .....word, i cherish this section, lol.. dope . . overall this wasn't boring at all, i like ur wording and have no issues with this at all, flowed nicely to me.. cool man, stay up..one