THE S.T.I FINALS - CERTAIN VS VULGAR!

sral · 10-25-2016, 11:50 AM

I'm going with Vulgar also this time out. At times the writing felt a little rushed, certain end rhymes etc irked me a little.

“Everyone seemed eager to talk at once, and the result was Babel”
he read from The Invisible Man, as the people below mumbled, bedazzled

Stuff like that particularly, but i'm a perfectionist faggot.

I can almost see where Oats was coming from in that the conclusion wasn't nailed home as strongly as was needed (I felt) and that maybe took some gloss off a solid enough showing.

Certain: I was almost a little disappointed in how brief this was. It was good writing, just not good enough. The execution is what cost you here. Vulgar took the topic and transcended it, you more so alluded to it (in my opinion) and so it came off like he tried more. Regardless of verse-length.

10-25-2016, 11:50 AM	#10
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