Genocide & IAmBent: Grab Ur Fucking Pens!

dead man · 05-17-2013, 03:40 PM

genocide - i feel like you should be doing music, like actual music. you seem to drop new verses like everyday so i know you have a passion and motivational drive to create this sort of thing pretty consistently, so why not explore other routes?

Lord forgive my new fashion, I've been so in a daze -lost
Baphomet around my neck, I'm only hoping it pays off

The battle inside never ends, better friends are enemies now
Chemically bound, about to explode if they don't let my acetalyne out

so sick to me. especially the last line.

i've had a tendency to skip over some of your verses, admittedly, because they have run together for their lack of distinction in terms of subject matter and tone. its like you could really just put a shitload of them together in a single huge verse and just spit it on a loop, and that could be a really tight song. do a whole album like that. no hooks.

but every now and then you just drop some fierce shit. and i am reminded that i need to stop skipping over your shit.

iambent. bro.. that luigi / daisy wordplay punchline whatever was horrible. lol you heard it here first. that should have not made it through your drafting process, and if you didnt have one, you probably should have.

your verse did not match geno's level of raw lyricism or heavy handedness. but you had your moments for sure and the styles contrasted in a complementary way in spots.

Going the distance, we know in an instant what lingers late
When we flow, we go Insync with the dopest of instincts, no Timberlake
Mind's gone off these lines, long as time this site's waited
For rhymes strong as lions to go ride Open Mic pages

apart from the pretty lame big sean delivery in your second line this whole section was nice. especially enjoyed the last two.

Recitals have you doing the worm naked, epileptic shit
Kevlar vest equipped, these rhymes are war on the track
Murder -murder, kill -kill, nothings more important then that

lmao. pretty sure this i geno at the end. i fucked with this. reminiscent of an old bone thugz style. probably bizzy or layzie.

anyway good shit guys. glad you're working to keep this place running at optimum efficiency. im trying to do the same.

thanks

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05-17-2013, 03:40 PM	#4
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	genocide - i feel like you should be doing music, like actual music. you seem to drop new verses like everyday so i know you have a passion and motivational drive to create this sort of thing pretty consistently, so why not explore other routes? Lord forgive my new fashion, I've been so in a daze -lost Baphomet around my neck, I'm only hoping it pays off The battle inside never ends, better friends are enemies now Chemically bound, about to explode if they don't let my acetalyne out so sick to me. especially the last line. i've had a tendency to skip over some of your verses, admittedly, because they have run together for their lack of distinction in terms of subject matter and tone. its like you could really just put a shitload of them together in a single huge verse and just spit it on a loop, and that could be a really tight song. do a whole album like that. no hooks. but every now and then you just drop some fierce shit. and i am reminded that i need to stop skipping over your shit. iambent. bro.. that luigi / daisy wordplay punchline whatever was horrible. lol you heard it here first. that should have not made it through your drafting process, and if you didnt have one, you probably should have. your verse did not match geno's level of raw lyricism or heavy handedness. but you had your moments for sure and the styles contrasted in a complementary way in spots. Going the distance, we know in an instant what lingers late When we flow, we go Insync with the dopest of instincts, no Timberlake Mind's gone off these lines, long as time this site's waited For rhymes strong as lions to go ride Open Mic pages apart from the pretty lame big sean delivery in your second line this whole section was nice. especially enjoyed the last two. Recitals have you doing the worm naked, epileptic shit Kevlar vest equipped, these rhymes are war on the track Murder -murder, kill -kill, nothings more important then that lmao. pretty sure this i geno at the end. i fucked with this. reminiscent of an old bone thugz style. probably bizzy or layzie. anyway good shit guys. glad you're working to keep this place running at optimum efficiency. im trying to do the same. thanks 1 __________________ Zack Wicks for president