Key for Swag and Flow

[Flow]

This was a key for the Swag and Flow Vs Witty

For fun I pass time skipping across vast lands filled wit land mines
Your as dumb as sharp nine, trying to use a gun to cut lines
Im a killer lyricist wit skills ridiculous Which i use to finish pricks
So slick an so sick I make Il nic look Fit for the Olympics
I put a name to flow when my swags on show, im a real sumthin swift G
An im on the edge of my seat cus it's been a while since you said something... witty
Literally, my flow is oh so incredible and my timing is oh so impeccable
Seriously orc get me on the voters list, chyeeeh will vouch for how my votes are credible
It's a known fact that I spradically combat random acts of violence
With a hatchet attached to a pack of cat fish, a lime twist an a eerie silence
I'm living the dream, bleeding rhythm, beats atilla was bringing in the BC's
I'm lyrically stinging g's like a pack of bees on a stampede high of speed
So heed this advice, I'm a magician, the way my lines are so precise
It would be wise to listen to how shit should rhyme, before you try to type

[Lars]

needs either more internals/multies for the flow to be on point or shorter lines.

generally in S&F people tend to go the more is more approach, so i'd go with the former.

some of this seemed madd lazy though:

Literally, my flow is oh so incredible and my timing is oh so impeccable
Seriously orc get me on the voters list, chyeeeh will vouch for how my votes are credible

oh so who gives a flying fuck? Sounds like you're begging for acceptance in that bar rather than just taking what you want.

you lose swag points for that IMO.

you're better than this.

[Flow]

Originally Posted by Lars

needs either more internals/multies for the flow to be on point or shorter lines.

generally in S&F people tend to go the more is more approach, so i'd go with the former.

some of this seemed madd lazy though:



oh so who gives a flying fuck? Sounds like you're begging for acceptance in that bar rather than just taking what you want.

you lose swag points for that IMO.

you're better than this.

Check ya facebook famalam

[Flow]

Originally Posted by Lars

oh so who gives a flying fuck? Sounds like you're begging for acceptance in that bar rather than just taking what you want.
.

Was a joke - chyeeh had a bit of a bitch about it last week lol not liking votes - were over it now

[Zen]

I don't wanna be an ass but I gotta say in my opinion this felt a little weak. I agree with Lars that you needa have a more intricate rhyme scheme for a S&F but really it felt to me like you were following the same style for a battle.
set up, set up, set up,
blah blah blah blah blah punch
If you're still in the tourney next week or this week whenever the next battle is I'd just tell you to come out with more complex wording and schemes to improve on this. Keep postin in the OM man.

EDIT:And I haven't checked to see if you've fed anything in the OM but I'll assume you haven't and you've upped your thread twice talking to Lars. Go drop some feed on other posts man if you all ready have then good.