Rap Beast Scheme

Mr. J · 07-27-2016, 01:55 AM

the lines were very stretched in this...
not sure how you wanted me to vibe to your flow

Wife beaters to real leaders, we’re all following a script. Our lives are poetic even when they’re nondescript.
Tragic catastrophes occurring around the world, rapidly. Because we don’t know how to live! Actually,

^^^^
this was a cool little attempt if you shortened it & twisted it
you have the whole concept of rhyming & have a decent idea on transitions...
but with some adjustments I think you will shape up to be a memorable rhymer
perhaps you will develop a flow that works with your style.
keep it up shep

07-27-2016, 01:55 AM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	the lines were very stretched in this... not sure how you wanted me to vibe to your flow Wife beaters to real leaders, we’re all following a script. Our lives are poetic even when they’re nondescript. Tragic catastrophes occurring around the world, rapidly. Because we don’t know how to live! Actually, ^^^^ this was a cool little attempt if you shortened it & twisted it you have the whole concept of rhyming & have a decent idea on transitions... but with some adjustments I think you will shape up to be a memorable rhymer perhaps you will develop a flow that works with your style. keep it up shep __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you